Now we as a group had agreed on our final film idea, it was time to pitch it to the commissioner (Mr Hood). At the end of our pitch we would all know if our film was to be commissioned or not. So to see how our film pitch went and what advice our commissioner gave us in order to make our film plan better watch this video below:
So first of all lets begin with the main positive: Our film was commissioned first time round.
Now lets recap some of the points, positives and negatives that were bought up in our pitch and some of the advice that was given to us in order to improve our film plan:
The first few positives made were that we would be able to pick our actresses easily, location was good but just need to be aware of the health and safety. So prior to the health and safety the risk assessment is a task we need to get sorted.
Now the first point that was bought up was the location. We were told that the location at particularly when the female character turns round and the male character has disappeared is a vital part of our film. As we need to make it clear that there are no exits for this male character, as people might misunderstand this part of the film.
So prior to this point the timing of the cuts and the editing was bought up as well as we were told that this is going to be key to our film, as to whether these sequences work or not.
A point that was suggested to us for our film was having a level of narrative. This was suggested so there could be an added level of pity for this female character so that audience could feel some kind of pity and sympathy her. It would also be good as we there would be a bigger contrast in emotions the audience will feel in the film as it is happy when she meets this person, but it's later not real. There was also a suggestion to have a short narrative at the start of the film as well when she wakes up.
The next point that was bought up was the costume and bedroom representation, and how we were going to use all of this to represent her as someone who doesn't quite follow the path as everybody would all want ourselve and someone who is alone and doesn't have a partner. So we told our commissioner that we are going to have the girl dressed in a big, thick, cardigans, with sunglasses. For her bedroom we said that we were thinking of having a double-bed and putting it on one side and having her bedroom look like a confined space so that it looks like no one could live there.
Referring to this point and the narrative, a suggestion was made to us of after the girl finds out that the male character is not real, and she wakes up the next morning, instead of her going through her usual routine of getting her cardigan and putting her nerdy sun glasses on, she should glamor herself up and bumps into someone who turns out to be real. This was suggested as it would be a very effective way to close the narrative, as the audience would know that the female character is fine and okay.
Our commissioner was concerned about our target audience range of 18 to 30. So we said that we thought that the age of characters within that age range would be relatable to them. Our commissioner then said but why wouldn't someone over the age of 30 who is about 38 for example not find our film interesting. We also said that some films have young female lead and young male lead characters in them and referred to an example of the film "Tom Traveller's Wife".
We were given advice to increase our target audience a little bit more.
Overall our film pitch went really well. We've just got to develop our narrative a bit more and increase our target audience a little bit.
